Category: Writers Block
Hey everyone,
here's a poem I wrote recently...
tell me what you think...
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Perspective of a Hospital.
The sent of coffee along with cafeteria food
smothers the stench of death and decay.
Disease clings to the walls,
Raps itself in the shadowy corners...
A center of false care;
Where one's only secure
for a time...
A place of anxious waiting,
watching,
hoping for the best.
Constantly trying,
and failing to get rest...
Forced medication,
you'll never quite know why,
all they tell you
is some crackpot lie.
It's all made up,
just because
they can "only do so much."
Everyone a masked face,
voices filled with fake cheer;
they try to make you feel better,
try to quell the mounting fear.
A place so dismal,
I'd never want to be;
yet every time I'm ill,
it's where they once more place me.
Then begins the waiting
and the hoping starts anew;
anxiety suppressed
for the sake of those around you.
You must be brave,
for all of their sakes.
these are the thoughts,
They pull at your mind;
Cause your resolve to brake...
Then the tears come,
The loss follows suit;
Every speech starts the same,
"I'm sorry; we did all we could do...”
Well done.
it has a good rhythm and plenty of anger
a feeling of bitterness
it
also has a strong sense of personal experience
but that's just a feeling
well done! Aint that the truth.
This isn't too bad, but lacks a wider appeal due to it's subjectivity and lack of focus.
Emotional, well paced and empathetic. Something a lot of us can relate to.
Good. I can totally agree with it. Keep writing.